- Some big concerns I had about my first draft was finding enough evidence to prove my thesis. I wasn’t sure exactly what points worked the best and would further my argument.
- My peers liked how I stayed clear and direct through my paper. Hayden said, “I never had to guess what you were trying to argue in any given paragraph.” They knew my perspective in each paragraph and I stayed persistent and strong with my view.
- I’m working best with Gee in questioning where I stray from his beliefs. My peers didn’t really say anything besides just introducing my quotes better.
- I was working best with Cuddy on my third page when I explained her view of ‘faking it until you make it’ and comparing/contrasting hew view with Gee. My peers said I should introduce Cuddy beforehand because I kind of plopped her in there.
- My two biggest challenges in my work are giving more introduction to my quotes and introducing Cuddy earlier in my paper. I will elaborate more for my quotes and lead up to them. For Cuddy, I’m not entirely sure how I’ll introduce her, but it will be earlier. I need to reorganize some of my ideas so it will flow better.
- I will help my reader get my perspective by being more concise with my quotes and introducing Cuddy earlier to counteract Gee and his opinions.
