Introduction:  I did not change much in the introduction paragraph. I changed some words to make it sound less repetitive. I also strengthened my claim by introducing Cuddy.

Evidence and Explanations: One major piece of evidence and examples I added was the information about Cuddy. I explained more about what she did and her research on power posing. I kept the majority of the rest of my quotes, especially the ones regarding Gee’s ideas.

Reorganization: I reorganized my topic sentence in my second paragraph and as well with my third paragraph. I also introduced Cuddy earlier in the paper as well. I also put two of my paragraphs together making it one.

New paragraphs: I added a new paragraph on Cuddy and what she did. It helped further my explanation of who she was and why she is relevant. I also added a paragraph about how Cuddy’s faking it until you make it needs prior knowledge like Gee’s mushfaking. The last paragraph I added as well to help strengthen my claim.